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 Soviet Rei's Poetry

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Soviet Rei
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PostSubject: Soviet Rei's Poetry   Soviet Rei's Poetry Icon_minitimeFri Aug 27, 2010 11:07 pm
Dunno if anyone is still around the poetry section, but if so...

Once there comes a time
when all good things
come to an end, an end
it is inevitable

Let those that seek
To finish this song
Play it for a day…
only then, let it end


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PostSubject: Re: Soviet Rei's Poetry   Soviet Rei's Poetry Icon_minitimeSat Aug 28, 2010 8:15 am
I likes it Smile
I'm not good at critique.... so I'll leave that to someone else.
But It's really good.
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PostSubject: Re: Soviet Rei's Poetry   Soviet Rei's Poetry Icon_minitimeSat Aug 28, 2010 7:12 pm
I think it was pretty cool. I am not the best and shorter poetry styles, but I did like the message of letting something end. ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Soviet Rei's Poetry   Soviet Rei's Poetry Icon_minitimeSun Aug 29, 2010 2:58 pm
Mountain…

Heavy are the mountains

Change with the passage of time

Sky

Blue sky

What your eyes see

What is unseen

Flowers

So many the same

Without shape, without purpose

Red sky, the colour

The colour I hate

Sun

The only one

The only thing to trust

Water

Red water flowing

The only thing that cannot bleed

Shape

Fading shape

The presence of another

Person

One person

Person born from red soil

Always beyond, beyond me

Sunset

Vanishing life

My wish…
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