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PostSubject: Insert poem related title here   Insert poem related title here Icon_minitimeFri Nov 20, 2009 11:22 am
I write poetry, as I'm sure you've gathered by the fact that I'm posting here. Sarcasm aside, enjoy it if you like.


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The screws are coming loose,
they clatter and they quake,
The bus just keeps on moving,
as the wheels start to shake,
No one hears the ruckus,
the sound of peace distrubed,
'Til a piece falls from the cieling,
then the people get perturbed,
Their voices break the silence,
the pervading sound of thought,
Time ticks on their cell phones,
'til they face the thing they wrought,
I cannot help a giggle,
as sweet chaos does ensue,
Quietly I count down,
from five, four and then three, two,
The people fall to quiet,
they stand to face their fate,
The bus pulls to a stop,
all the passengers are late.
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PostSubject: Re: Insert poem related title here   Insert poem related title here Icon_minitimeSat Feb 06, 2010 9:47 pm
I like the imagery of the poem. Nicely done. ^^
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